For our 9th blog, we were told to revise a section of our blog analyses. My revision will be from my fourth blog analysis. I was really excited about this one, and so proud, but I realise that it was like my other blog analyses in its format.
This is the conclusion that I had written:
Overall, these three blog posts by Disney Parks give a good, well-rounded idea of what the Park is about and what they do. The ideas that they portray can inspire other Parks to do the same.
My revision is as follows:
Overall, these three blog posts by Disney Parks give a good, well-rounded idea of what the Park is about and what they do. "See The Jeweled..." is a good representation of Disney's attempt to be more culturally aware, "New Sips…" gives adults an idea if they want to get away from their kids for a while, and "Wildlife Wednesdays: Sea Turtles..." appeals to nature lovers and wildlife enthusiasts. The ideas that they portray can inspire other parks to do the same.
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